Critique my Listing,Norma,Florida

[Norma510]

Please give me ideas on my listing . How can I catch people’s eye , is my title ok , I need constructive criticism nicely 

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[John7474]

Hello @Norma510 !

What a beautiful home you have!  What an ideal place for a family to stay while visiting the Disney Parks and Orlando!

To enhance your listing, I do have a few small  suggestions: 

I would change your Headline to, maybe: "Luxurious Family Home in Orlando - 10 minutes from Disney Parks".

I would start your listing description with a question... "Looking for a ideal place for your family to stay while visiting Disney World and the Magic Kingdom, this beautiful home is the place!"

Find a way to really sell your proximity to Disney, as your home a bargain for a family visiting Disney. I can't imagine what hotels must cost!  

In addition, you are providing a whole house, with a swimming pool and lots of space.   Maybe add "your entire family can stay just 15 minutes from Disney at a fraction of the cost of Magic Kingdom hotels".   "Your own pool, and space to spread out, at a fraction of the cost!" "After a day at Disney, you can experience the 'magic' of this beautiful home, a perfect place for the entire family to unwind, and plan your next adventure!" 

I think you have done a wonderful job of laying out your description!  I like your lists and stars!  You have really spelled it out!   Maybe describe the Disney themed rooms for the kids.. And maybe list nearby restaurants (family friendly places.. ) 

I would retake your first picture. The quality isn't very good. You have a wonderful home, but sweep up the leaves and clean up the area a bit.  You want your first picture to leave guests with a lasting impression.  If the first picture looks a bit unkept and blurry, people might wonder what the rest of home is really like. 

I think you can remove a few pictures... maybe the one in the family room with the curtains closed.  I would just use the one with the curtains open.  Same with one of the empty pool, I would use the ones with the "pool toys" and table / umbrella. 

Same with some of the outside pictures, I am not sure what the open "fields" are.  

I think Disney fans will love your decoration with Micky and Minnie Mouse!  Great job with the kids rooms. The kids must love it!! So clever! 

Since you allow pets, make a separate list (apart from your house rules): "House is pet friendly. Pets are welcome to stay with prior approval and XYZ criteria" 

Your listing said  beach access ? Is that correct?  What beach is it? Maybe describe it. 

You state no marijuana smoking, but you allow cigarette smoking? If  you don't, I would state: NO smoking in the house or outside. 

Again, you have a wonderful home, and have an amazing opportunity for years of successful business!

Best, 

John

[Patricio2]

Such a beautiful listing @Norma510  besides what @John7474 already said, I would only advise you to create a map for the customers to get into your listing from the airports and deliver it to the guests that book your listing

[John7474]

Hola Patricio!

Gracias por tus comentarios.

¡Qué hermosa casa tienes en Ecuador! No he estado en Ecuador, pero es uno de los lugares que espero visitar.

También necesitarás visitar nuestra casa en Oaxaca, México! 

Deseándole que siga teniendo éxito con su negocio de Airbnb.

Saludos, 

John "Juanito"

Hello  Patricio -

Thank you for your comments. What a beautiful home you have in Ecuador!

I have not been to Equador, but it is one of the places I hope to visit.

You will need to also visit our home in Oaxaca, Mexico! 

Wishing you continued sucess with your Airbnb business.

Best, 

John 

[Norma510]

Ok

[Norma510]

John thank you so much and for putting it in kind words I took your advice and I use it all thank youuuuu

[John7474]

Hey Norma -

Glad I was able to help out!

You have a awesome home, and wishing you all the best!  

Cheers! 

John

[John7474]

Me again.. I just looked at your listing.. I would edit out the quotation marks..for example,  "looking for a place".  

Just use the copy, without the quotations marks: e.g.

looking for a place.

I would clean all of those out of your description copy. 

Then... Re-read, and recheck everything.  

As a writer, I spend half my time editing what I wrote, as I always leave out words, or find things don't make sense.  Our brains work faster than our fingers! 

Clean copy gives the reader a sense of professionalism, which then is a reflected of your house! 

Best, 

John

[Norma510]

ok , taking more pics tomorrow and cleaning up leaves etc thanks

[Norma510]

Hello @John7474  just took some pics how’s it look???

[John7474]

Hello Norma -

Thank you for your note.  I like your new pictures! Great job! 

I suggest: Re-stack and organize your  photos a bit.

 If you want to start with a pool picture (use one), I would have the outside of the house as your second picture, then the rest of your pictures. 

I would also remove any duplicates.  

Again, you did a really nice job. 

Best, 

John 

[John7474]

Hi Norma - 

I took a look at your listing:   I removed repeated lines, and cleaned up the punctuation.  Below is what I suggest:

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Looking for a ideal place for your family to stay while visiting Disney World and the Magic Kingdom?  

This beautiful home is the place!

Your entire family can stay just 15 mins from Disney at the fraction of the cost of Magic Kingdom Hotels.

With your own private pool and space to spread out, this large  home is  an ideal place for the entire family to unwind and plan your next adventure!

[Norma510]

Thank you