HI @Lisa10248 !
What a stunning unit! It's decorated so beautifully and sounds like a terrific location!
Your listing is very informative for potential guests to understand what they're getting. You are also very communicative and focused on so much that would be of interest. I know your guests will appreciate that.
With that being said, I am an editor by trade, but also a communicator. So when I look at your listing, my first instinct is "wow there are so many places I would like to see, food I would like to eat, what a beautiful location this is in my top five!" Though I do feel that your listing details could be trimmed down... Because I did feel a bit overwhelmed as there are several options I don't know if I would have been interested in, and after reading so much I sort of lost track of what drew me to the property.
Many of the places and eateries you mentioned are mentioned in other areas of your listing (which potential guests will naturally gravitate towards when traveling for leisure and local attractions).
Might I suggest taking your copy and running it through AI, just to ask AI what it could offer you to "trim down redundancy". AI can be a great tool to do this!
Look at the places that AI took out.
That should be a great start. (Not that you have to do what it says, but it should help you get more succinct and/or see places for improvement.)
After taking those suggestions into consideration, I would suggest removing anything you've already listed elsewhere in the listing, or just minimize how you might be wording/restating things, such as parks, coffee shops, local restaurants etc, etc.
In my opinion, the main listing should be the basics that they really want to know and in succinct clear form: what floor, basic location, number of beds, etc. (which you have 👏🏼) then Airbnb does a fabulous job of allowing us to insert all of the other "extras" into our listing via the platform fill-in sections. I would stick to those for all of the heavy tourism details. Don't exclude really special valuable places it if you don't want to (it's just a suggestion to keep it brief).
A good example would be the keypad mention; you could actually write that someplace else that Airbnb provides and save the reader time. I have one on mine but it's not in the actual description of the listing it's elsewhere else.
I do want to say that I am grateful, as a guest myself and fellow host, that you are so respectful and let potential guests know they are going to be above a restaurant. It doesn't bother me personally, but it can often bother other guests very much! So the fact that you are respectful by putting that on the table immediately, I found wonderful and honest! I would definitely keep that! I was also thinking about how your post mentions that you'd like more traffic during the less busier times of the season- like weekdays... If the restaurant is less busier during those times, therefore possibly a tad quieter, that might be something you would mention in your listing! That would be a big perk for those who have an aversion to rooms over restaurants and could increase your booking rate during those times.
One thing that did confuse me about the listing, was how it mentioned there was one of eight units, however there is only one unit listed (and shown), which left me to question where are the other seven units were (such as if I wanted to rent a different one from you) ... But then I realized after rereading the listing again and looking at all the pictures again, I think you meant that you own one of the condos in the building. Am I correct?(Updated after I reread your post I noticed you own them all... ) If you are just listing the one unit on this, I would just state less on that. If you have multiple units believe there are options to add a link to those units on your host profile.
So I agree with the other commenter's note -about the layout plan... It appears to be two bedrooms on the plan, but the listing says one. It caused me to go back to the pictures and the listing to make sure I was reading it correctly and understood. (We all know that technology can be tricky, so if the guest is confused they may wonder if there a typo or field filled incorrectly or photos missing.) If it mentions other units but does not list them all, they may not understand and they may skip your place just because they don't understand it all. (Though mentioning multiple units is important so see below.)
So, if it's just one unit, I would definitely try to crop the other unit out. And as the other commenter also said, including a photo about what the building looks like or the door set-up inside in relation to other doors- might be a good idea.
Photos can help tell the story, and with trimming some wording it will bring it all together for your potential guests. It's fine if there's other condos there... But sometimes trying to explain it all becomes too much and even a bit confusing. (I had this experience when I stayed in an Airbnb in Kentucky, which I happen to love and we have now stayed there a couple of times. But the first time we stayed there, their over direction about where the door was had us traipsing up and down stairs all around the building in the winter in a blizzard- it wasn't fun. Sometimes less is more.)
In regard to being 30 mi away from the hotspot and it's tough in the off season, you might try to work something in on that... which could be a draw for those who want to be away from it all (like traffic, heavy, population, partying crowds, if that is the case there).
I think you have a great base!
Potential guests might just be a little overwhelmed by such a long listing and not read the whole thing...sometimes too much information is not good (I've learned this through lots of experiences with overstating information on every level in my personal and business life). I may have even done it myself in this response lol.
If you can keep it simple, and they are able to scroll through quickly, identifying the most important parts of what they want, they will most likely favorite your place and put it in their top five, or they may book immediately! It's definitely a gorgeous unit, sounds like a great location, and you seem like a very courteous host!💕
I haven't read any of your reviews, but you also mentioned why guests love it there! You might try gathering some inspiration for your description from those reviews from guest who stayed in the off-season, then you'll be speaking your next guest's language! 😉
I wish you much luck, and we are here to see your revised listing if you'd like to share later! Thanks for giving us the opportunity to support you!
Amber 💛
